- 'Nice establishing shot but it is quite slow
- Change the font of the titles – it Is not good
- You need institutional logos at the start
- Look at the placement of the film title – it is right on top *The shot where he walks across the screen with the lamppost in it is too long
- Some of your shots are much better
- Consider placement of other titles too – some of them are over the action
- Consider sound track
- The shot after he has thrown the leaflet away and the shot on the bridge is too far shot over to the right – it looks odd as he has just been in the centre of the frame
- As an opening title sequence it runs well
- Narrative is difficult to follow'
- Miss Peacock and Mr Bluck -
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