Thursday 13 February 2014

Rough Cut One




Feedback

  • 'You need an institutional logo - at least one at the start
  • You need at least another 30 seconds of footage
  • The notebook on the bench is not great
  • Your titles are not in the correct order - look at your research for this
  • The voice over is not good - there are gaps in it - will you add in non diegetic music?
  • The Film Title font and lavishness is bad - does not fit in with the genre
  • Some of the shots are out of focus and need to be filmed again
  • The narrative doesn't make sense - does he love him? who is it? I thought it was meant to be a gangster film - it feels like a love story at the moment.'

~ Miss Peacock and Mr Bluck ~

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